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写作指导

体育运动

写作任务:

假设你是青山中学的一名学生。来自美国的格林队(Green Team) 将于本周六下午2点来你校,与青山篮球队(Tsingshan Team) 进行篮球比赛,比赛地点设在学校的青山体育馆(Tsingshan Gym)。赛后观众可以和两个队的队员合影留念,并可选出5位幸运者与他们切磋球技。请你帮忙写一则英文海报张贴于校内外。

要求:

1. 语句通顺,书写规范；2. 60词左右(开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数)。

Basketball Match Notice

Dear friends,

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____________________________________________Don’t forget to be on time.

Tsingshan Middle School

October 6, 2009

写作分析:

该写作任务要求我们写一则通知,属于应用文的范畴。动笔之前我们要从格式、段落、写作要点和时态等方面加以分析。

(1) 格式

格式在写作要求中已经给出,所以在写作时只要注意不要马虎就可以了。

(2) 段落

根据写作内容,我们可以大体上把比赛时间、地点和参赛球队信息列为一段；赛后活动列为一段。

(3) 写作要点

根据写作任务,我们把海报内容分为以下几方面:

比赛时间:本周六下午2点

比赛地点:青山体育馆(Tsing-shan Gym)

参赛球队:美国的格林队(Green Team) 和学校的青山篮球队(Tsingshan Team)

赛后活动:观众可以和两个队的队员合影留念,并可选出5位幸运者与他们切磋球技。这里需要准备的词汇有:take photos, lucky people, play basketball with等。

(4) 时态

因为这场比赛是在本周六即将举行的,所以应以一般将来时态为主。

初稿:

Basketball Match Notice

Dear friends, there will be a basketball match between Green Team and Tsingshan Team. Green Team from America and Tsingshan Team from our Tsingshan Middle School, and they both played basketball well last year. The match will be held at two o’clock this Saturday afternoon.After the match, you can take photos with the players. Five lucky people among you can play basketball with them. Don’t forget to be on time.

Tsingshan Middle School

October 6, 2009

初稿点评:

初稿段落划分得很好,时态运用很恰当,语言表达也很流畅,但是存在两个问题:

1. 写作要点不齐全,比赛的地点被遗漏掉了。如果比赛地点没交待清楚,观众就无法按时到场观看比赛,这是一个严重的错误。我们可以改为:There will be a basketball match between Green Team and Tsingshan Team in Tsingshan Gym of our school.

2. 画线句子存在语法错误,应修改为:Green Team is from America and Tsingshan Team is from Tsingshan Middle School and they both played basketball well last year.

下面请看修改稿。

成稿:

Basketball Match Notice

Dear friends, there will be a basketball match between Green Team and Tsingshan Team in Tsingshan Gym. Green Team is from America and Tsingshan Team is from Tsingshan Middle School and they both played basketball well last year. The match will be held at two this Saturday afternoon.

After the match, you can take photos with the players. Five lucky people will be able to play basket-ball with them. Don’t forget to be on time.

Tsingshan Middle School

October 6, 2009

Powerful sentences:

1. The activity is organized by the Chinese Young Pioneers. 这次活动由少先队组织。

2. It’s time for you to take part in the game. 你该加入比赛了。

3. The match will last five days. 这场比赛将要持续5天。

4. The game will surprise you. 这场比赛会使你感到吃惊的。

5. The game will be wonderful and you will enjoy yourself. 这场比赛将会很精彩,你会过得很愉快。

巩固练习:

今年,第十一届全国运动会将于10月16日在山东开幕,并于10月28日结束。本次运动会共有33个大项的比赛,这些比赛将分布在全省17座城市中举行。为吸引外国友人观看,请你为即将来临的全运会写一份海报。

要求:1. 语句通顺,要点齐全；2. 50词左右。

参考词汇:第十一届全国运动会The Eleventh National Games

National Games Notice

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参考范文:

National Games Notice

The Eleventh National Games will be held in Shandong Province this year. And it will last from October 16th to October 28th. There are 33 sports at the National Games. They will be organized in seventeen cities of Shandong. People around China will take part in them.

Welcome to Shandong.